Sunday 17 November 2013

My Story: Titanic

Here is my story,


It was the evening  15th of  April 1912 when I was having dinner with my mama,papa and my little sister, our family was quite rich as my mama and papa were the owner of the titanic we were 1st class passengers and we were in a very large room with 3 bedrooms, 2 lounges and 2 showers. I was quite hungry as I had a big day playing squash, swimming and going in the gymnasium with my sister. After dinner i wandered out and walked around the boat looking at all the glamourous ladies in their beautiful dresses and wearing lovely diamonds, After I walked past them I realised I forgot to tell my parents were I was going, I thought to myself should I go back or continue??.. I decided to continue even thought this was my first time around the boat by myself.


Suddenly a loud siren started to go and I go frightened that I forgot my way to our cabin, the loudspeaker started to come and and it said: “EVERYONE THIS IS NOT A DRILL, PLEASE HURRY AND PUT YOU LIFE JACKETS ONE AND REMAIN IN YOUR CABINS AS WE MAY CRASH INTO A HUGE ICEBERG BUT DO NOT WORRY”I got chills down my spine and stayed still for about 3 minutes then I started to hear screams from the way i came, they started soft and grew louder as they reached towards  the end of the ship I ran to through the enormous crowd of people and started to hear my mama calling me I ran to her voice but it was too late the ship had already started to sink and I did not have my life jacket on i kept running and I saw people going on to little boats i tried to go on one but they said I needed a parent so I stayed on the titanic and started to cry and get ready to die, I lied down on the top of the titanic and waited for it to sink completely after 10mins I was at the bottom of the ocean having a long sleep but I hoped that my mama, papa, and sister got away safe.





Tuesday 10 September 2013

One of the family

Today Norm Hewitt visited Tauranga intermediate to talk about the SPCA and about his family and when he was young, when he was seven when he wanted to be a cowboy, but when he was nine he wanted to be an all black. Norm has 2 children and a wife, he also has a dog called rusty, that they do mostly do everything with their dog because he is a part of this family! The presentation was about 1 hour and 15mins long and at the end he gave out prizes if the people got the questions right :) There were 5 freedoms the first one was shelter, then food and water, then exercise, then love and lastly vet care! He said that dreams come true and treat animals how you want to be treated.   It was really cool and I cant wait till I see Norm next time!!

Here is a pic of Norm playing Rugby:

Sunday 8 September 2013

JoyM Setting and Story Openings


Story Openings
WALT: describe the setting of a story using ‘show’ not ‘tell’SC: - to use descriptive language to help the reader visualise the setting- to use language that activates the readers’ senses e.g smell and sound- to use similes and metaphors to describe the setting- to use interesting vocab to describe the setting
I want you to practise describing the setting of your stories, hinting rather than being direct so as to keep your reader interested.Look at these story openings. I haven’t told you where the story is set, but I have described it through the things you might see and hear if you were there. Can you guess where my stories are set?
Story 1The automatic doors opened swiftly as Jade strode in. She glanced quickly at the cluster of signs and pressed on down the wide polished corridor. Ahead of her a set of double doors flew open and a trolley, pushed by five concerned faces, passed rapidly by. The smell of antiseptic caught at the back of her throat. Pushing through the doors at the end of the corridor, she emerged into a brightly lit room. Rows of plastic seats groaned with injured people. Where was Manny? The call had been brief. All she knew was that Manny was here somewhere… . The Hospital
Story 2Sadie thrust the ticket into the man’s hand. Half-torn he returned it and pulled open the door. Her eyes narrowed as she stepped forward urgently into the dimly-lit room. Stale popcorn collapsed under her feet. She felt her way down the narrow aisle. She had agreed to meet Gerry somewhere in the middle. The front was too close, whilst the back meant you spent most of your time staring at the hairstyle in front. A young couple stood up to let her pass, their coats fell from their laps and were lost in the dark alley beneath their folding seats. The Movies
Story 3The vegetables gleamed under the lighting as special offers swung giddily on their strings from the ceiling. He inched forward, keeping himself well hidden behind the woman whose child rocked in the metal cage provided at the back of the trolley. As they passed the cheese and milk a cool draught caught the back of his neck, sending a shiver down his spine… The Supermarket
Story 4The warm dusty draught flapped at her coat, revealing the lining and causing her to pull it tight around her. She thrust her ticket into the metal slit and strode forward confidently. The dull whirring of the escalators carried her down, lost in the confusion of posters advertising West end shows and cheap phone calls. She thought she saw a familiar face passing upwards to her right and stared back to see if she were right… . Train Station

I think the setting for story one is: At the Hospital The words and expressions that helped me guess were:She said she saw rows of plastic seats groaned with injured people, that there were double doors and that she saw a trolley, pushed by five concerned faces.

I think the setting for story two is: The Movies The words and expressions that helped me guess were: she had stale popcorn collapsed under her feet and she made her way down the narrow aisle. that there were lots of rows of people.
The words and expressions that helped me guess were: I think the setting for story three is: The Supermarket
I think the setting for story four is: Train Station The words and expressions that helped me guess were: That she thrust her ticket into the metal slit and saw all the advertisements.

· Now try to write a story opening in which your character passesthrough these places:a schoola video shopa park
Before you start, think about the things you might see or hear in these places. Collect some interesting vocabulary to help you write.
People screaming, Skyscrapers, Tons of people, Pay Stations, Food places, Cotton candy.My Story:
People stand in a long queue waiting to get an experience of a lifetime and face their fears, I run into the biggest space I had ever seen and after a couple of minutes to take it all in, I sprint to the biggest and fastest ride, I sit down and then without warning………...Woooooshhhh I screamed my head of for the first seconds and I could see the person next to me looking quite sick, but luckily she did not vomit, after the ride I felt soooo tired that I just decided to go home!
Remember, describe the things you might see and hear if you were there. Don’t tell your reader directly.Share your work with a buddy and get them to assess whether you have achieved the SC.
Use the link here to generate a random scenario and write an opening for your story.
Did you achieve the SC?
SC:
You are on a roller coasterI think it was a very good story well done
- to use descriptive language to help the reader visualise the setting- to use language that activates the readers’ senses e.g smell and sound- to use similes and metaphors to describe the setting- to use interesting vocab to describe the setting







Thursday 1 August 2013

Giving Homework

Giving

1.  Today I washed the bathroom, it was already quite clean but I decided to clean the bathroom again!  When I washed I actually washed myself because my hands were so clean,soft and they smelt nice!!
When my mum walked in to see the bathroom she was so happy!! So now I can't wait to do my next job!!



2. Today I vacuumed the house and as soon as i turned it on i got such a fright because our vacuum is so loud but after I  vacuumed around my bedroom, mum and dads bedrooms I got used to the job and it took me about 15 mins!



3. Today I cleaned the windows and it was actually a cool job because it only took 10 mins and after I finished I could see through my bedroom window once again my mum was pleased because that meant she had one job less!



4. Today I made our lounge cleaner by putting rubbish in the bin, make the book shelf tidy and dust under tables! It was really boring but I got through it really quickly and my mum and dad were really happy!!


5. Today I helped out in the garden,pulling out weeds, watered all the flowers\plants, and trimmed 14 ( I think ) plants! it was a nice day to do it,I worked up a sweat! Dad was super pleased because he didn't have to do it, but it was actually a pretty cool thing to do and after I finished I enjoyed a nice cold ice - block!!

Thursday 23 May 2013

Food Tech! Yummy :)

For the past week I have been at food tech, The first day we did food tech we made jam tarts, The next day we made banana chocolate chip muffins, On Thursday we make a quiche, and today we had to make two changes to the any original  recipe so buddy (Jessie) and I make 2 changes to the jam tart and added chocolate chips and coco power. In the end it tasted really Yummy!




Here are some photos of me and me bestie Jessie!



Tuesday 14 May 2013

My Homework Challenges!

My Homework Challenges
Challenge 1. I have swam 2k non stop. In April I went to rotura to swim 2k non stop! it took me 45 minuets and when I finished it I felt so sick but happy that I had completed it!


Challenge 2.
I have visited my Grandma at her rest home  once  everyone sunday in term 4 last year. I visited my Grandma and the other elderly people at a rest home close to BayFair.

I played piano for my Grandma and the other elderly people for 1 hour. Then my Grandma died in January Challenge 3. I Have been in a surf live saving club for 5 years. I started Omanu surf live saving when I was six and i have loved it ever since! I train 3 days a week in the summer and do swimming to improve my surf in the winter.
Challenge 4. I have played school Water polo . I played Water polo in term 1 at Tauranga intermediate, I think it was really fun to learn how to play Water polo and i learnt heaps, and it also helps with your fitness witch is really good to!
Challenge 5. I have completed an national event  - Oceans 13\ Surf Life Saving, Oceans was the best competing experience i have ever had so far and i learnt so much like reading the waves ( One of the days i had to paddle out on my glass board in 2 metre to 2 and a half meters! ) In the end i make it through to the next round!

Challenge 6. I have played piano for 6 years, and i love playing it so much it is so fun and good because you can learn how to play music and play for you family members and show them how much you have improved! I started when i was 5 playing the keyboard and when i was 7 i brought a brand new piano, and I am now grade 3!

Monday 13 May 2013

My Book Review


Lily Alone

Jacqueline Wilson
Nick Sharratt Lily is an older sister to 3 younger siblings, as you would expect they are all very annoying! All she wants is just a little peace and quiet... When her mum goes on a holiday with her new boyfriend and leaves her with the 3 kids. Can they keep their secret without getting caught or get put into a childcare home??

Sunday 5 May 2013

My awesome holiday at Brisbane, Australia

In the holidays I went to Brisbane with my dad for 1 week. We stayed on a yacht with friends and sailed around Tangalooma Island,  Moreton bay, we stayed there one night each and then sailed along to    some  smaller  islands and stayed over night. I swam under ship reeks, saw dolphins being feed, went snorkelling, skiing,  i saw rainbow fish when i went  snorkelling! I also saw a shark or dolphin fin when i was skiing ! And then i saw a brown snake when i was paddling!, and then i saw a turtle swimming under the ship reek! It was so cool and i had such an amazing experience!


-Dolphins being feed at Tangalooma Island 7pm
The ship reek at Tangalooma Island- 

Tuesday 16 April 2013

Welcome To My Blog

Hello my name is Joy, I am a year 7 student, in room 29.
My hobbies are: Surf life saving, Swimming, Ballet, Piano, Judo and Drama.
Tauranga Intermediate is the best school ever!!