In the holidays I went to Brisbane with my dad for 1 week. We stayed on a yacht with friends and sailed around Tangalooma Island, Moreton bay, we stayed there one night each and then sailed along to some smaller islands and stayed over night. I swam under ship reeks, saw dolphins being feed, went snorkelling, skiing, i saw rainbow fish when i went snorkelling! I also saw a shark or dolphin fin when i was skiing ! And then i saw a brown snake when i was paddling!, and then i saw a turtle swimming under the ship reek! It was so cool and i had such an amazing experience!
I like the way you used lots of descriptive writing.
ReplyDeleteI also liked that you put pictures on there.
I think you need to work on your paragrafs.
Thank u so much Jessie it really helped :)
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